Friday, June 24, 2016

Something though the air By Camden Bruce

                      Wellcome fellow Bloggers
     today I will be sharing my writing hope you like it
   from Camden Bruce
 






Free Choice Writing
Persuade, Entertain or Inform?
I am learning to communicate my ideas effectively to the reader.
You choose the topic and you choose the writing purpose. This needs to be your best independent writing for assessment. Below is the success criteria for quality writing. Use this criteria and go for it!

Success Criteria (Sentence formation has been our main focus)
Content & Ideas
Include a range of ideas with clear details.
Sentence Formation
  • Include simple, compound and complex sentences
  • Start most of my sentences with different words
Vocabulary
Choose words and language features to meet my purpose.
Structure
Clear beginning, middle and end with paragraphs.
Spelling
My best spelling with good attempts at words I don’t know.
Punctuation
Use all basic punctuation (capital letters, full stops, question marks and exclamation marks) correctly and attempt some complex punctuation.


                     
                            Something though the air By CamdenBruce  

Once on a dark and windy night something didn’t feel right. The Atmosphere was more windy than normal. When I looked out the window I saw a flying saucer. I ran outside to see the wreckage of a ufo. This was bigger than I expected but the three grey aliens came out with ray guns and weird looking hand cuffs. They said sorry wrong planet we come from mars. And going to the moon because there are aliens on the moon but can only be seen while you have a space suit on. But that’s for humans. We need to destroy them they are trying to destroy earth. But now that we have crashed on earth we have no chance of getting away. Maybe we can work out something with president Obama mabe? Let's do it once we had it we had seen many scared people and went to the white house and said that we need parts for a spaceship for the greys and the greys said the earth is going to be destroyed. He said ok we need to get the best scientists to do this and the best engines for planes. Ten weeks later the ufo was as good as new and the greys walked into their ufo and started up the engines all three aliens said thanks and flew off. One year later the greys stopped the moon aliens.
The end


                               

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